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Sonam961986 · 09-11-2009, 09:52 AM

Hello everyone ... I am starting a ff with LNMDJ characters but the lead ones are Prithvi and Damini and the story revolves around them ......

Characters:-
Arjun Raichand (Prithvi) - Angry young man, stone outside but a heart of gold inside ... he does not believe in love stories ... a male shovenist ... loves his father so much that he can do anything for him ... anything .... (26)

Naina Kapoor (Damini) - Angry young girl, arrogance is her forte yet she is the sweetest of all ... she does not believe in the concept of love ... stands tall in the male dominated world ... a feminist ... her father is everything for her ... but she does not allow anyone to rule her life ... anyone ...(25)

Rohan (Sameer) - Arjun's friend ... a soft spoken guy ... he leads a simple life and lives life to fullest ... Arjun is his best friend and has always supported him in the good and bad times.. (25)

Ria (Avni) - Naina's friend ... a sweet innocent girl .... she is very simple and is very content with what she has .... Naina is her best friend and both of them have always been together since both were kids .... and has always supported her in tough times.. (24)

Bhaskar Raichand - Arjun's father and a business tycoon ... loves his son but his business is the most important part of his life ....

Vikram Kapoor - Naina's father and a business tycoon ... business severything for him but he loves his daughter very much ...
Setting: Cape Town

Plot:-
Marriage - a very beautiful and a pure bond which just not brings two people together but unites their souls ... where they promise to be together in all times .... walk hand in hand on all paths wheteher rosebeds or the thorny paths ....
But what if it becomes a business deal?

Sonam961986 · 09-11-2009, 05:14 PM

Raichand Household :-
Bhaskar - Jake, where is Arjun?
Jake - Sir, he has gone for horse riding ....
Bhaskar - Oh ... yes .... apart from me if anyone he loves are horses .... okey when he returns tell him to meet me in my office ....
Jake - Yes Sir ....

Kapoor Household :-
Vikram - Ye Naina kahan hai?
Ram (her caretaker) - Is waqt wo aur kahan ja sakti hai .... horse riding ke liye gayi hai ....
Vikram - Mere mana karne ke baawjood .... ye ladki kabhi kisi ki nahi sunti ... acha jab aa jaaye to use kehna mujhse aake mile ...
Ram - hmm ...

Arjun from years comes to the John Loc Ranch ... its his favourite one .... whenever he is happy or sad he comes here ... he feels calm and peaceful here ....

Naina always comes to Reo Di Ranch ..... whenever she feels lonely she comes here .... all her pain goes away when she comes here .....

But Naina is sad today as the horse she loved has died - Jamian ..... because of this she has decided to never visit Reo Di ever ... cuz they didn't save him .... she always talked to Jamian and always rode him ... today she visits the John Loc Ranch .....

Arjun's favourite horse is Ron ... he cares for him and always rides only on him .....

As Naina reached the ranch .... she saw Ron who reminded her of Jamian and started riding him.... as she was riding .... Arjun saw her there but could not see whether its a girl or a boy .... it was his personal time and he hated when someone else would come there and ride on Ron ...... he took another horse and came there .... he challenged the rider for a race ..... Naina accepted it .....
As they raced .... for the first time both didn't win .... it was a tie .... Arjun was impressed and so was Naina ..... as she removed her helmet .... Arjun was shocked .......
Arjun - Tum ek ladki ho!
Naina - Haan to?
Arjun - Maine pehli baar ek ladki ko ghoda chalaate huye dekha hai ..... By the way jis ghode par tum sawaar ho .... wo mera hai ....
Naina (came down) - Fine .... mujhe ise dekhkar apne ghode ki yaad aa gay thi bas isiliye .....
Arjun was quite stunned by her but didn't show it and so did she ......

This beginning would start a love story or .....

dragon1993 · 09-11-2009, 07:28 PM

great! plz continue!!

emily_dmg1 · 09-12-2009, 06:49 AM

OMG!!!! sonam I LOVE PRIDA !!!!!
awesome FF please continue i will make sure i read it !!!
Love
Emily !
xx

Sonam961986 · 09-12-2009, 08:32 AM

After a little while as they started to talk to each other they found that the other one is a strong contender ...... It is said that if you hate someone from bottom of your heart it actually turns into love ..... but here love is too far .... right now its the hatred that speaks for them .....

Arjun - Tum samajhti ho ki poori duniya tumhaare ishaaron par naachegi ... to tum galat ho kyunki main un logon mein se nahi hun jo kisi ke ishaaron par naache ... main logon ko nachaane waalon mein se hun ....
Naina - Main bhi un ladkiyon mein se nahi hun jinhe kisi ke sahaare ki zarurat padti hai .... main apni zindagi apni sharton pe jeeti hun kisi aur pe dependent ho kar nahi ......

Both have a tiff and realise how much they hate each other .....

Naina - Aaj tak kisi ne himmat nahi ki mujhse is tarah baat karne ki ....
Arjun - Badlaav zindagi ke liye acha hota hai .....
Naina - Tumhe kya lagta hai zara si muscles bana liye, ghudsavaari seekh li, to tum kahin ke hero ban gaye ..... par mujhe underestimate karne ki koshish bhi mat karna ....
Arjun - Kyun tum kahin ki maharani ho?
Naina - Nahi, par tum jaise logon ko kaise handle karna hai ye bahut achi tarah se jaanti hun ....
Arjun - Acha ....
and comes little closer .... at the same time Naina's phone rings .....
Ram - Bete kahan ho? Sir tumhara wait kar rahe hai ....
Naina - Aa rahi hun .....

And she leaves .... as she was going she turned behind with anger and saw Arjun sarcastically smiling at her .......

At home .....

Ria and Naina were in Naina's room .....
Ria - Naina shaant ho jaao ..... relax ....
Naina - Wo insaan apne aapko samajhta kya hai? Uski himmat dekhi wo mere paas aane ki koshish kar raha tha .....
Ria - Tumhe zarurat kya thi usse ladne ki ....
Naina - Arre, wo samajhta hai ki ladkiyon ko dabaa sakta hai .... main use batana chahti thi ki wo mere saamne kuch bhi nahi hai .....
Ria - Naina .....
Naina - Kya? I seriously hate him ..... pata nahi kis cheez ka ghamand hai ... tumhe uski akad dekhni chaahiye thi .... agar Ram chacha ka phone nahi aaya hota to 2 min mein uski saari akad utaar deti .....
Ria - Chodo na ..... tum uske baare mein itna kyun soch rahi ho?
Naina looked at Ria .... and smiled ....
Naina - Correct .... chalo tumhare liye shopping karne chalte hai ......

Rohan - Yaar shaant ho ja ... chill ....
Arjun - Us ladki ka dimaag phira hua hai ..... pata nahi kya samajhti hai apne aap ko?
Rohan - Tujhe uske munh lagne ki kya zarurat thi?
Arjun - Aise sarphiron ko main khoob achi tarah se thikaane lagana jaanta hun .... usko agar wo phone nahi aaya hota to use aisa sabakh sikhata na ....
Rohan - Bhai .... chod na ..... hum us ladki ki baatein kyun kar rahe hai?
Arjun went in some thoughts ... and smiled ...
Arjun - Right ...... chal bol kahan jaana hai?
Rohan - Filhaal to ghar .....

Sometimes what life has in store for you .... you never know ....

PRECAP - In the next part yet another fight but somthing happens and a different feeling stirs in their hearts ......

X__Disturbiia__X · 09-12-2009, 12:47 PM

Wow!! Amaziin Sonam
Keep It Up
XxX

dragon1993 · 09-12-2009, 08:20 PM

great work!!!

lesha742 · 09-14-2009, 05:50 AM

Really good work wish u best of luck for the next...... thank u.

emily_dmg1 · 09-18-2009, 07:24 AM

Amazin Update Sonam Dii !!!!
Sorry For The LAte Comment But i Was Kinda Buzi !!
Good Job !!
Love
Emily
xx

fakhargreat · 09-18-2009, 03:52 PM

Great work

boshaa · 09-19-2009, 10:24 AM

Your update was mind blowing. I was soooooooooooo excited man, It was truly amazing. man you stay sooooooo busy but still come and write for us. that also soooooooo beautifully. Your ffs are just amazing. How i wish the show was like your ff only.

Sonam961986 · 09-20-2009, 01:23 PM

Naina was little depressed as Ria was going to India for a month and her father was as usual busy in his business ... she was feeling lonely .....

Arjun had a meeting with some deligates .... later he was missing his mom and wanted to spend some time with himself .....

Both decided to go to the lake .... as both were driving from opposite sides, their car struck ....
Arjun - If you don't know how to drive .... why the hell you sit on the driver's seat?
Naina - Who the hell you are to talk to me like that? Who gave the license to you?
Arjun - Oh .... tum ladki ho, car to kabhi theek se chala hi nahi sakti ....
Naina - Oh hello! you male shovenist pig ..... jab ek aurat desh chala sakti hai na .... to uske liye car chalana koi badi baat nahi hai ..... samjhe!
Arjun - Mujhe tumhara lecture sunne mein koi interest nahi hai ... get that!
Naina - Mujhe bhi tumse baat karne ka koi shauk nahi hai .... fool ...
Arjun - Idiot ....
and both leave .......

Naina reached the lake before him ...... she was sitting near the lake and was throwing pebbles in it thinking about how her father ignored her from her childhood ....tears started coming out of her eyes .... she quickly wiped them ...
Naina - Naina, ye tujhe kya ho gaya? you are a strong girl .... tu rone waalon mein se nahi hai ..... you are self sufficient ... tujhe kisi ki zarurat nahi hai .....

Arjun reached the lake and saw Naina there as never before ..... he could feel her loneliness .... and saw her wiping tears ....
Arjun - Ye ladki itni emotional bhi ho sakti hai ..... khair mujhe kya ..... (after thinking for sometime) .... mujhe shayad uske paas jaana chahiye .... par main kyun jaaun?

Later as he was coming near her ... she was getting up but lost her balance .... Arjun ran to hold her but he too fell with her in the lake ..... both were eventually holding each other ..... both looked into each others' eyes .... moonlight shining on them ... her hands on his shoulders and he was holding her waist ...... they were never so near to anyone .... they could hear each others' heartbeat and feel each others' breathing ...... Naina soon looked down ... and removed her hands from his shoulders ..... he slowly removed his hands from her waist ..... both came up ....
Arjun - Tum theek ho?
Naina - Hmm .... tum?
Arjun - Main bhi theek hun ..... tum theek ho na?
Naina (confused) - Maine kaha na main theek hun .....
Arjun - Maine tumhe rote huye dekha tha ..... isliye poocha ...
Naina - Main .... main .... main kyun rone lagi? Main nahi ro rahi thi .... mujhe koi problem nahi hai ....
Arjun (looked into her eyes) - Are you sure?
Naina - Hmm .....

Both sat near the lake .... Naina was still throwing pebbles in the lake .... Arjun looked at her .... her face was glowing in the pale moonlight .... for the first time he found her beautiful .... he quickly shifted his sight from her to the lake .... she glanced at him ..... she felt calm with him ..... his care for her made her feel relaxed .... she quickly removed her eyes from him ..... both were quiet .... they had a lot of pain in them .... but the soft silence and the pure breeze as if reomved all the pain and they were left with a heavenly calmness and peace ........
Naina - Mujhe chalna chahiye ...... ahm ... thanx for your company .... ab mujhe acha lag raha hai .... bye ...
Arjun - Mujhe bhi chalna chahiye .... welcome ... and thanx ....
Naina - Kisliye?
Arjun - Pata nahi? Bas tumhare saath baithkar mera man halka ho gaya ..... shayad isilye ....
Naina softly smiled .... Arjun smiled too .... both walked together to their cars ....
Arjun - Goodnight ....
Naina - Goodnight ....

Both drove back home ..... with some unusual thoughts in mind and unknown feelings in their hearts .....

What life has in store for us we never know ......

boshaa · 09-21-2009, 10:09 AM

first of all, thanks a lot for updating so soon....this is really a treat for us......so thank you!

secondly, wwwwwwwwwwooooooowwwwwwwwwwww......that was soooooooooo cuteeeeeeeee....i absolutely loved the Prida scenes.the one thing i didnt like at all about your fan fic is............................its tooooooooooo short yaar.......make them longer pleaseeee....i really love reading this.....you know i saw the second part posted this afternoon but i didnt read it b/c wanted to save it so i can enjoy reading in peace and quiet.....lols...i know i m a dork.

I love your screenplay and dialogues.. very true to the characters. Plus its nice how you are balancing everyone - no sidelining complaints at least in this FF..

Cant wait to read more.. do continue asap. You are very, very good!! wow Sonam.... u r just awesome.... ..... i really can imagine all this happening in between them ...... gr8 job yaar... plz continue soon..... ur imagination is tooooooooooooo gudddddddddddddd
ok....i think you have to read other people's comments too....so i should shut up now.....i have a tendency of decribing and pointing out the things i really like about each part....lols.

update soon...!! i'll b w8ting fr ur nxt part.......!!!!

Sonam961986 · 09-23-2009, 08:27 AM

Next Update: Friday, 25th Sept 2009

all right guyz .... for you all ... i wud tell you after every update when will I update next ..... and one thing ... most probably I update on Fridays .... okey ....

and bosha thnx for ur comment .... and definitely the next updates' wud be lonnng .... atleast i will try to do tht ....

arudra94 · 09-23-2009, 09:49 AM

omg! sonam! i just came to the LNMDJ thread and wow..i see ur FF on here..and im lik i have to read this seriously! just amazing!! wowowow..loved the last part! chooo cute!! oooo 25th september! i cant wait until then!!

Sonam961986 · 09-25-2009, 02:18 PM

Guyz I am sorry ..... i can't update today ..... but tomorrow definitely ..... I am really very sorry ..... please forgive me .....

arudra94 · 09-25-2009, 10:30 PM

Sonam-thats totally fine!! take ur time! i will wait..we will all wait! for sure!! hehe..

Sonam961986 · 09-26-2009, 05:24 PM

Naina - Shayad maine use kuch zyada hi galat samajh liya tha ...... wo male shovenist hai par itna bura bhi nahi hai ......

Arjun - Ye ladki .... female activist se kam nahi hai .... par phir bhi .... itni bhi buri nahi hai ........

After that last meet .... both never met anywhere .... maybe it was God's decision ..... slowly ..... their memories started fading from their heart ..... but faces remained in some corner of their mind .....

Naina joined guitar classes as her mother loved it ..... she started spending her days with the guitar ...... trying to kill her loneliness .....

Arjun was soon made th MD of the company .... lot of work load but he never felt it .... he was smooth with all the work ....

Their lives were good until .............................

Vikram Kapoor and Bhaskar Raichand were planning to have a joint venture ... for which they were going to have a meeting ... two top business tycoons coming together was a huge thing but to come together is not that easy ........

Kapoor - Hello, Mr. Raichand ....
Raichand - Hello, Mr. Kapoor ..... aaiye .....
Kapoor - Sure ......

They dicuss the project ..... they agreed on everything ......

Kapoor - Raichandji ... ye sab to theek hai .... par ....
Raichand - Par kya? Aap ko kisi clause se koi aapatti hai ....
Kapoor - Nahi .... par main chahta hun ki ye deal ... sirf ek business project nahi ... par usse bhi aage jaaye ....
Raichand - Matlab? Main kuch samjha nahi .....
Kapoor - Main chahta hun ki aapke bete aur meri beti ki shaadi ho jaaye .... tabhi main is venture ka hissa banunga ....
Raichand (surprised) - Hmmm ..... mujhe lagta hai ......
Vikram Kapoor gets tensed .....
Raichand - Ki yeh .... (smiles) bura sauda nahi hai ..... ye humaare is venture ke liye bhi kaafi acha rahega .....
Kapoor (smiles) - Yahi meri bhi thinking hai .....
Raichand - Par main chaahta hun .... ye sab jald se jald ho jaaye ..... I mean .....
Kapoor - Uski fikar aap mat kijiye .... agle hafte meri beti ka birthday hai .... usi waqt dono ki engagement kar denge aur ye announcement bhi kar denge .....
Raichand - Brilliant .... aur 15 din mein shaadi .... tab tak saari legal formalities bhi poori ho jaayengi .........
Kapoor - No problem .....
Kapoor and Raichand hug for a start of a new ........ business deal ..........

Kapoor Household:-
Vikram - Naina .....
Both were ahving dinner "together" ......
Naina - Hmm ...
Vikram - Mujhe tumse ek bahut zaroori baat karni hai .....
Naina - Kahiye ....
Vikram - Maine tumhaari sagaai Raichand ke bete se tay kardi hai .....
Naina immediately stands up .... she is shocked ...
Naina - WHAT????? Are you joking???? Aap aisa kaise kar sakte hai ......
Vikram - Tumhaare janmdin par hi sagaai hogi .........
Naina - Dad please ...... first you need to give me an answer ....... meri zindagi ka itna bada faisla, mujhse bina pooche aap kaise le sakte hai?
Vikram - What do you mean? Tumhara baap hun main ..... poora hak hai mera aur haan shaadi 15 din baad hogi .....
Naina - Baap ka hak ..... kis hak ki baat kar rahe hai aap? Aaj tak kabhi mujhe apne haathon se khana bhi khilaya hai? kabhi meri chot par malahm lagaya hai? kabhi poocha hai mujhse ki main khush hun ya nahi? kabhi mujhse pyaar se baat tak nahi ki hai aapne ..... ek baat dhyaan se samajh lijiye .... main ye shaadi hargiz nahi karungi .....
Vikram - NAINA!!! Tumhe ye shaadi karni hi padegi ..... aur tumhe mujhse is tarah sawaal karne ka koi hak nahi hai ...... Main Raichand ko vaada kar chuka hun ..... so .... no more dicussions .... it's done .... you are going to get married to Raichand's son .... clear?
Tears start flowing from her eyes .....

What will happen next?

dragon1993 · 09-27-2009, 07:28 PM

thanks sonam!!

arudra94 · 09-29-2009, 08:52 PM

Wow! Sonam!! Just read the part and amazing!! a totally different turn!! cool! really like it!! please continue soon!